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Dear Senator Kyl:
It was revealed this week (It is a very weak beginning to start with a passive voice. You need to turn the sentence around to make it active voice. Perhaps something along the line of "As you are aware, USA Today broke with the news that phone records across the country were sold to the NSA by telephone companies....."
that the U.S. government has been gathering the phone records of millions of Americans. This has been done without probable cause or even rubber-stamp warrants from the Foreign Intelligence Surveillance Court.
During the resulting, (No comma needed here) and unsurprising uproar over this, you, as an elected representative of the people (comma needed here) whose privacy was so baldly (do you want "baldly" or "boldly"? Boldly sounds better. ) violated, opined that “This is nuts. We’re in (a) war. And you’ve got to collect intelligence on the enemy.”
Later, (comma not needed here) on a Fox News talk show, you added “every cops-and-robbers show that you see in prime time talks about this same kind of thing. They have a telephone number. 'Let's run a trace and see who else he called or who called him.' It's standard criminal investigative practice.”
Perhaps on TV it is, but whether on TV or (this phrase is not needed) in reality, it is NOT “standard criminal investigative practice” to gather the records of everyone (add, perhaps, "in the country"). The practice that you are referring to involves specific research into a specific person’s records, when a judge has determined that there is probable cause to do so, (comma not needed here) and has issued a warrant.
Senator Kyl, with all due respect, when did WE become the enemy?
Given your history of contempt for your constituents (remember calling us ‘dupes’ for passing The Drug Medicalization, Prevention and Control Act in 1996? substitute "one example of this were your comments in respect to: The Drug Medicalization, Prevention and Control Act), and now considering us ‘enemies’ (how about "recent revelations infer that you believe WE are the 'enemies'"), I have to ask you, (personally, I would exchange a long "em" dash instead of a comma here) do you really want to be our elected representative? If we are as foolish and even (take out even and just put in "as") despicable as you have said, are we truly worthy of your services as our United States Senator?
Just something to think about as your reelection campaign gears up. I would substitute something like "Please take time to consider your position as our Senator at this time, and whether you are willing to risk re-election at a time when many of those who are following the Republican party line might be seriously in jeopardy of losing their jobs come this November."
Your constituent,
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