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Edited on Tue Feb-07-06 08:42 PM by Neil Lisst
These are criticisms that may merely be my personal preferences. Take them or ignore them.
1. Intro sentences.
They currently read:
"February 6, 2006, was the first day of the NSA wiretap hearings conducted by the Senate Judiciary Committee. During the opening minutes of this hearing, the committee voted -- down party lines -- that Attorney General Alberto Gonzales didn't need to be sworn in."
I would have written it thusly:
On Monday, February 6, 2006, Attorney General Alberto Gonzales did not testify before the Senate Judiciary Committee under oath, because Republican Committee Chair Arlen Specter ruled that he need not swear to tell the truth. On a party line vote, Republicans supported Specter's ruling and voted down the request of Democrats that such testimony be under oath.
Then I would conclude the intro paragraph with your third sentence, placing the ending period within the quotes, so that it reads:
That's right, a witness of one of the most important Senate committees is not required to "tell the truth, the whole truth, and nothing but the truth."
2. Middle paragraph.
I would not change it, except to properly place the period inside the quotation marks, thusly:
This article reports that Karl Rove has "threatened to blacklist any Republican who votes against the president."
3. Third paragraph.
It's fine, although I'd use "No one," instead of "Nobody." It could use a comma at one point, but not worthy of noting.
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