My greatest first line of a story EVER
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Thu Mar-27-08 12:36 AM
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My greatest first line of a story EVER
"A Municipal Councillor is scared large killer frogs could take-over the city." How's that for an attention grabber?
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Thu Mar-27-08 12:38 AM
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1. It's a damned good start.
:) Take-over sounds like they're very intelligent frogs though. Please don't mind me for being pedantic, but I'd suggest "overrun."
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Thu Mar-27-08 12:40 AM
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2. I'm going with "Take-over" for the Sci-fi effect.
Of course, this story will end with them all being killed.. so I gues it ain't THAT funny.
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Thu Mar-27-08 01:00 AM
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3. but "take-over" is a noun
"take over" is a verb phrase.
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Thu Mar-27-08 01:02 AM
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4. the hyphen is for ease of reading - I'm in radio.
Edited on Thu Mar-27-08 01:02 AM by HEyHEY
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Thu Mar-27-08 01:14 AM
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5. oh, if this is for a radio broadcast
you need to punch it up a bit! Think "War of the Worlds".
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