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Writer (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Fri Dec-15-06 08:36 PM Original message |
Grammar Whores, check in! How would you rewrite this sentence? |
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JackBeck (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Fri Dec-15-06 08:38 PM Response to Original message |
1. Sally loves alpha males and went out with Billy because she saw him |
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NV Whino (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Fri Dec-15-06 08:39 PM Response to Original message |
2. two sentences |
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cami715 (155 posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Fri Dec-15-06 08:59 PM Response to Original message |
3. one complex sentence |
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Xipe Totec (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Fri Dec-15-06 09:01 PM Response to Original message |
4. What's wrong with it the way it is? |
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NNadir (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Fri Dec-15-06 09:08 PM Response to Original message |
5. Sally saw Billy strangle Karl. She saw him antagonize Lou. She saw him |
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spindrifter (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Fri Dec-15-06 09:15 PM Response to Original message |
6. Sally, who loves alpha males, went out with Billy |
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petronius (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Fri Dec-15-06 09:17 PM Response to Original message |
7. Sally has really bad taste in men. She went out with Billy, who is a violent dirtbag. |
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JackBeck (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Fri Dec-15-06 09:20 PM Response to Reply #7 |
9. That is the biggest laugh I've had all day! |
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InternalDialogue (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Fri Dec-15-06 09:20 PM Response to Original message |
8. You're burying the lede. |
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JackBeck (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Fri Dec-15-06 09:21 PM Response to Reply #8 |
10. Oh, shit. These keep on getting better! n/t |
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Oeditpus Rex (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Fri Dec-15-06 09:24 PM Response to Original message |
11. 'Sally needs therapy' |
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pink-o (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Fri Dec-15-06 09:44 PM Response to Original message |
12. But this is where the story shifts... |
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cwydro (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Fri Dec-15-06 09:46 PM Response to Original message |
13. Sally called Jack, in tears, |
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Redstone (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Fri Dec-15-06 09:51 PM Response to Original message |
14. Two changes: Add a comma after "Lou," and delete the comma after "therefore." |
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