Quick question: Is this sentence grammatically correct:
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Tue Nov-15-05 12:12 PM
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Quick question: Is this sentence grammatically correct:
Here it is: "Bush's own press briefings show he made it policy to limit access to information to Congress." Thanks-in-advance DU!
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Tue Nov-15-05 12:13 PM
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"Bush's own press briefings show that he made it policy to limit access to information to Congress."
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Tue Nov-15-05 12:14 PM
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2. Not sure but it's awkward
Too many "to"s. How about "Bush's own press briefings show it was his policy to limit Congressional access to information."
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Tue Nov-15-05 12:15 PM
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3. that one sounds better
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Tue Nov-15-05 12:16 PM
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Unless someone else comes up with something better, I'll use that.
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Tue Nov-15-05 12:18 PM
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I'll be here all week. :P
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Tue Nov-15-05 12:24 PM
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6. also might make it absolutley clear what kind of info he limited
- intelligence information. To nit pick (you asked) are you sure of the term policy? - to me that means a written set of guidelines, Could you mean: "Bush's own press briefings show that he limited Congress' access to the full intelligence information."?
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Tue Nov-15-05 12:29 PM
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7. It's meant for a headline: (Tell me if it fits)
Edited on Tue Nov-15-05 12:29 PM by brainshrub
Here is the article I wrote, tell me if you think the headline fits: www.brainshrub.com/congressional-access-information
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Tue Nov-15-05 02:46 PM
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I like the part about them being surprized bloggers (or anybody) would go back and check their words. The #@*&^%^$@*)^%s.
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Tue Nov-15-05 12:30 PM
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Tue Nov-15-05 01:57 PM
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"Bush's press briefings demonstrate his policy to limit Congressional access to intelligence information." (I always try for the fewest words possible.) Nice article. Good luck.
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Tue Nov-15-05 02:44 PM
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11. I like the word "own" in there
it help emphasize HIS responsibility for the problem.
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Tue Nov-15-05 03:56 PM
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13. Thank-you for the kind words.
As Kali responded earlier, the word "own" connoted responsibility. I'm happy you liked the essay. :D
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